[教师点评]这是一篇介绍个人习惯的习作.全文主题突出,结构合理,详略得当.however,as possible as I can,what's more等词语及定语从句、宾语从句等的运用,增加了文章的文采.但如能将第三段中的more and more fat改为fatter and fatter...[教师点评]这是一篇介绍个人习惯的习作.全文主题突出,结构合理,详略得当.however,as possible as I can,what's more等词语及定语从句、宾语从句等的运用,增加了文章的文采.但如能将第三段中的more and more fat改为fatter and fatter,则表达会更加恰当.展开更多
文摘[教师点评]这是一篇介绍个人习惯的习作.全文主题突出,结构合理,详略得当.however,as possible as I can,what's more等词语及定语从句、宾语从句等的运用,增加了文章的文采.但如能将第三段中的more and more fat改为fatter and fatter,则表达会更加恰当.